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| - | * p 35: The paragraph beginning "The definition and measurement of beauty" wanders off into philosophy a bit. I'd shorten this paragraph, perhaps keeping only the last two sentences.
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| - | * p 35, para -2: "defined by the horizon" => "defined by their horizon"?
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| - | * p 36, para 2: "steeply increased" => "greatly increased"
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| - | * p 36, para -2: "This is problematic" => "This was problematic"
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| - | * p 36, para -2: "most applications are fine" => "most applications were fine"
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| - | * p 36, para -2: "certain pieces is gone" => "certain pieces were gone"
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| - | * p 36, para -2: "developers are informed" => "developers were informed"
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| - | * p 36, para -2: "they can no longer compile" => "they could no longer compile"
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| - | * p 37, para 1: "on screen" => "on-screen"
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| - | * p 37, para 2: "the API usage" => "the API's usage"
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| - | * p 37, para 2: "the ultimate open source project" => "the ultimate open-source project"
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| - | * p 38, para 2: "negatively effect" => "negatively affect"
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| - | * p 39, para 2: "well intended" => "well-intended"
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| - | --[[User:AdamDingle|AdamDingle]] 01:20, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
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| - | * I agree with Adam that the discussion of beauty was much too long.
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| - | * Page 35, para 1: "it has much a large chance" should be "it has a very large chance"
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| - | Thu Mar 27 21:58:13 CDT 2008
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